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On the twentieth day of July 69,
For the first time in history,
The moon landed on a man.

The first time such move had been attempted by a celestial body,
A great feat of precision,
Didn't crush the man at all.

You see, we see things from our eyes,
And everyone knows our eyes see upside down.
Or is that the right way up?

I could tell you about walking through deserts,
The beauty of running water, of rain,
You'd be thinking of TV shows.

When was the last time you were challenged,
Walked away from a conversation stunned.
Who are you listening to, me or yourself?

If beauty is in the eye of the beholder,
Is meaning in the eye of the reader?
More importantly, are you reading this upside down?

Every word you read is yours,
Make your own sentences,
Take your own morals.

And even though I wouldn't dream of telling you what to do,
Look within other people,
You'll see yourself.
Find out what you are,
Where you are headed.
Find your own moon and land on it.
©2004-2009 ~silveroxide
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Daily Deviation

Given 2005-07-22

Your Poem by ~silveroxide

Poetry can be used to expand the imagination. It might not be written in a devastatingly new way, but this little piece demonstrates how words can be used to twist you into a new way of thinking. (Suggested by `demonlight and Featured by `ndifference)

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:iconadamvellender:
Good stuff as ever - thought provoking. :+fav:
:icondemonlight:
This is absolutely bloody brilliant. New perspectives are, and should be important to everyone, not just the writer. Sometimes poetry is necessary to just twease open the narrow perception of a person and spread them wide open. It can be uncomfortable, but hey. And you're absolutely right. As we move toward something, often it is moving toward us as well.

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:iconreyo:
I like this piece. I don't really know what to say about it, it works very well, it feels "complete," and while the language is relatively simple it works very well and can be read (and easily understood) by any reader.

A :+fav: for sure. Very nice work. :-)

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When all else fails, stay true to yourself. It's the only thing you have full control over.
:iconer0k:
you know I just got done reading a book called d_sxp_f/102-6397743-7317719?v=glance&s=books"Jonathan Livingston Seagull by Richard Bach recently and I can't help but be reminded of it when I read this..your twisting, playfull, flipping of words is beautiful and others have said very thought provoking..

not to :+fav: would just be stupid :P

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:iconer0k:
ahh shit sorry..the link came out totally wrong. I apologize heh ;)

Book I was referring to:

Title: Jonathan Livingston Seagull
Author: Richard Bach

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..it's like visual heroin, with none of the withdrawls!

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:iconlivingbyair:
Seems like you ought to find yourself with a moon on bored.

But that's how I read it.
:iconquinnz-x0x0x:
wise words. made me think .. thts a brilliant poem :)

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- One n Two n Three n Four - repeat - JuSs [Beat] that [Drum] -
:iconlillithseden:
great.

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One should judge a man mainly from his depravities. Virtues can be faked. Depravities are real.
Klaus Kinski

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